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(Message started by: Black_Eyed_Girl on Oct 25^th, 2006, 7:51pm)

Title: SO MANY TO CHOOSE FROM!!
Post by Black_Eyed_Girl on Oct 25^th, 2006, 7:51pm

Okay I've got a bunch of poems ready but I'm not going to waste my time trying them all out when you are only going to read one or two. So tell me which ones you want to see.

The Options:
A. The Angel and I
B. The Mistake I've made
C. All Wet
D. My Broken Everything
E. You Lied
F. A Short Life
G. Questions of Life

Happy picking.

Always,
Felicia 8)

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Post by georgej on Oct 25^th, 2006, 7:53pm

"A" and "G", Felicia.

Best,

George

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Post by Black_Eyed_Girl on Oct 25^th, 2006, 7:59pm

I like those ones too. Any one esle got any requests? Let me know! Please and thank you!

Always,
Felicia 8)

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Post by maffumatt on Oct 25^th, 2006, 8:00pm

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Post by Bethany1 on Oct 25^th, 2006, 8:01pm

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Post by kissmyglass on Oct 25^th, 2006, 8:02pm

C. All Wet....has a nice ring to it...

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Post by Paul98 on Oct 25^th, 2006, 8:07pm

A and C Felicia.

-P.

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Post by Black_Eyed_Girl on Oct 25^th, 2006, 9:19pm

Ok any one else? Polls close tomorrow when I get home from school at 3. Tick tock!

Always,
Felicia 8)

P.S. Maybe if you're lucky I'll post a couple of them at a time. You might just get to see them all.

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Post by davyp on Oct 26^th, 2006, 5:04am

on 10/25/06 at 21:19:25, Black_Eyed_Girl wrote:

You might just get to see them all.

Well thats what i want, while i might not understand some of your poems (being a man) i think they are fantastic. And while i might not post about them if i see a post from you i always open it before any others to check for poems.

Dape

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Post by sandie99 on Oct 26^th, 2006, 5:27am

I like A & G. :)

Best wishes,
Sanna

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Post by cosmicfunkfather on Oct 26^th, 2006, 9:36am

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Post by LeLimey on Oct 26^th, 2006, 1:53pm

I'd like to see them all, I don't want to choose by title as that can be misleading, some of the best books I've ever read had the duffest of titles! I don't care of you post or pm honeybun but I at least would like them all!
love
Helen x

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Post by Black_Eyed_Girl on Oct 26^th, 2006, 3:49pm

The polls are closed. I'm a little late but that's ok. And the final top 3 are: A."The Angel and I", G."Questions of Life", and C"All Wet"! So here they are.

The Angel and I
I stood next to an angel
& called out your name.
Looking at me the angel replied,
"I am here for you."
Taking a step away,
I again called out your name.
Stepping closer again the angel said,
"I am here for you."
Walking through the never ending darkness,
I again called out your name.
The angel was suddenly there
& said, "I am here for you."
Shaking my head I explained
that they were not the one I needed.
Sighing the angel smiled.
"I was there next to you,
& only a step away.
I came to through the darkness,
& now you say you do not need me.
My friend, you keep calling my name,
but run because I am not who you think I am."
Pausing the angel took my hands,
and placed them on my heart.
"I am here for you."

Questions of Life
If life is a dream why can't I wake up?
And if I'm so rich why do only tears fill my cup?
If I'm so poor then why do I have everything I need?
And if I'm so loved why am I all alone?
If I've got so many friends why do I get left at home?
So again I ask: If life is a dream why can't I wake up?

All Wet
I sit under and open sky. Under a tree is where I lie. Suddenly I feel a small splash. The rain comes in a flash. I can make it to the house, I bet. By the time I get there, I'm all wet.

Maybe next time I'll post the rest. We'll see how you like these ones for now.

Always,
Felicia 8)

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Post by Black_Eyed_Girl on Oct 26^th, 2006, 9:09pm

Well what do you think? It's been all most 5 hours and still no relpies. I'm starting to worry. Please let me know!

Always,
Felicia 8)

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Post by georgej on Oct 27^th, 2006, 3:26am

I very much like "The Angel and I". Your style and voice is really coming into place, Felicia.

Kudos.

Best wishes,

George

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Post by LeLimey on Oct 27^th, 2006, 5:20am

I can't get over how different all three are. Your style os so varied its flabbergasting Felicia! I still want to see the others though. ;;D
The angel and I is like a story with a moral, it reminds me of "If" and poems like that which I love.
Question of life is very profound and "uncomfortable" making. It has the ability to make me ask questions I don't really want to think about so its a thought provoker category for me and the third is just pure fun. Its the sort of poem you read aloud, smile and crash the book shut just for the sheer fun of hearing the noise.. like when you read to kids. Thats one I could imagine reading to Jasper, doing just that and then going out to stomp in puddles together :)

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Post by Carl_D on Oct 27^th, 2006, 6:41am

I'm with Helen on this one, but wanna see D and G.

You should know...

I have started this morning recording two songs. One is an instrumental and can you guess what the 2nd one is? ;)

Peace,
Carl

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Post by no-one on Oct 27^th, 2006, 7:14am

:) may I have some more, please
great as always
love you
b

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Post by davyp on Oct 27^th, 2006, 7:35am

3 totaly different poems
3 totaly awsome poems that conjure up thoughts and mixed emotions.

Thank you Felicia.

Dape

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Post by AussieBrian on Oct 27^th, 2006, 8:00am

I'm the first to admit that the thoughts expressed are terrific in themselves, but as poetry goes they leave me quite cool. To my mind a poem must have rhyme and time or it's merely prose badly punctuated.

Like music without a beat - a melding of sounds and noise, terrifically important to the 'musician', but music it ain't.

I look at these so-called masterpieces of modern art, paint splashes and cows intestines, to be reminded of that lovely description of the genre. "Created by the incompetent and sold by the unscrupulous to the gullible".

Not to take away for a moment your flair for original thought, Felicia, just your layout and treatment of your audience.

Keep writing always for it's a joy in itself,

Brian.

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Post by Black_Eyed_Girl on Oct 28^th, 2006, 8:33am

I'm glad you liked them. I'll try and get more up soon. But you've got to tell me which ones. I've already had a request for D and G. Please let me know so I can find them in the mess I call my room. ;)

Brain, you sorta confused me because I wasn't sure if you liked them or not. But when dad explained that you're a musician I understoodwhere you where coming from. I might try to find some that ryhmed for you if I can ever find my big book poetry.

Again glad you all liked them. Hope you like the next ones just as well.

Always,
Felicia 8)

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Post by Black_Eyed_Girl on Oct 29^th, 2006, 9:11pm

Okay folks here there are. It took me a minute to find them but I've got 'em. They were under the bed. ;) Anyways, here ya go!

My Broken Everything
My broken heart beats.
Flub-dub. Flub-dub.
Crying eyes drip.
Drip-drop. Drip-drop.
My flaming lungs can't breath.
Choke on thin air.
My knees crumple
& I fall down real hard.
My feet feel like dead weights
as I try to move forward.
My face is hard as stone
frozen hard from crying.
So on I live,
with this dead, broken everything.
My broken heart beats.
Flub-dub. Flub-dub.
Crying eyes drip.
Drip-drop. Drip-...no drop.

A Short Life
Trapped in this life, with no way out.
Holding on, waiting for you to hear my shouts.
Time ticks by, like sand in an hour glass.
I sit here waiting, preying it to pass.
Memories ring loud in my head.
Blink and suddenly I'm dead.

You Lied
You said you where my friend;
You lied.
You said we'd tell each othere everything;
You lied.
You said you'd always tell me the truth;
but guess what?
YOU LIED!!!

Try those on for size. Hope ya like 'em!

Always,
Felicia 8)

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Post by AussieBrian on Oct 29^th, 2006, 11:05pm

Much more to my taste, thank you. Expressions like drip-drop and flub-dub are terrific used like that and are called onamatapoea. Best I ever heard (and I wish it was my own) was a high school girl writing verse about cockroaches and she described them as "Ukky and yukky and lurking and bleeaagh!"

Happy daze,

Brian.

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Post by DonnaHar on Oct 29^th, 2006, 11:59pm

Keep the poems coming.....very entertaining.

Thank you.

A quick, off topic question to Brian.......

Looking at the members map of where we live, you are miles out in the water. Did you just miss the mark or was it intentional?

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Post by AussieBrian on Oct 30^th, 2006, 3:52am

I'll be honest, Donna, in that while it's an island in its own right, it's also rather small and more a hazard to shipping.

(Edited to add: Recently shifted camp and have changed my profile accordingly. Thanks for the reminder.)

And we now return you to your regular program.

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Post by davyp on Oct 30^th, 2006, 6:14am

Another 3 wonderful poems felicia now ya just need to post B. The Mistake I've made so that we have seen the full set ;)

:) Dape :)

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Post by BB on Oct 30^th, 2006, 7:13am

I like "Broken everything " the best !

Very original :)

Keep going Felicia

Annette

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Post by Ree on Oct 30^th, 2006, 6:39pm

very cool... Ree

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Post by Cathi04 on Nov 1^st, 2006, 3:49pm

Can someone tell me why Felicia is a guest now???

Cathi

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Post by Linda_Howell on Nov 1^st, 2006, 6:07pm

check your pm's Cathi