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A Tear: Poem
« on: Jan 14th, 2007, 10:21am » |
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I wrote this at like midnight last night. So its probably not one of my best. But here it is anyways.
A Tear
Darkness envolped the earth and the waves crashed upon the rocks leaving a blood streaked stain. Standing high above the water on the barrier of rocks, she watched as the world fell at her feet. He ran to her side and side not a word. Staring in horror he saw thousands die and the world eat itself alive. How could all this happen he wondered to himself. Without hearing his question the girl answered. "All this, because of a tear."
Hope you like it.
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Holding on his hand, when every second of everyday I feel like letting go.
You hurt me before.Never again.I won't give up and I sure as h*ll won't let you win!
My Poems and Stories at:http://www.quizilla.com/users/hiddeninsight/stuff/
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Re: A Tear: Poem
« Reply #1 on: Jan 14th, 2007, 10:58am » |
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 it only takes one tear but one hug and smile can change the world.
As always very good
l love you
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Re: A Tear: Poem
« Reply #2 on: Jan 14th, 2007, 5:50pm » |
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Whether that hug is given or recived it is always welcome. Anyone else?
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Holding on his hand, when every second of everyday I feel like letting go.
You hurt me before.Never again.I won't give up and I sure as h*ll won't let you win!
My Poems and Stories at:http://www.quizilla.com/users/hiddeninsight/stuff/
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Re: A Tear: Poem
« Reply #3 on: Jan 14th, 2007, 9:09pm » |
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Hope the last poem you posted and deleted wasn't biographical 
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Re: A Tear: Poem
« Reply #4 on: Jan 14th, 2007, 9:11pm » |
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((((( Broken )))) sensed u needed a hug....Hang tuff.
Peace always Mike
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"If at first you don't succeed,,Get out the hammer,,If the hammer don't work,,Go back to bed....."Have you hugged your kids lately?" Peace always, Mike
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Re: A Tear: Poem
« Reply #5 on: Jan 14th, 2007, 9:33pm » |
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on Jan 14th, 2007, 9:09pm, pubgirl wrote:Broken
Hope the last poem you posted and deleted wasn't biographical
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GOD NO!! I was watching CSI and it just kinda popped into my mind. I deleted it because I didn't think it was apporprate for the site. I didn't feel comfertable leaving it here because it was so graphic. I'd rather leave it at that.
Thanks Mike. You said you wanted to see some of mine so here it is. What do you think?
on Jan 14th, 2007, 10:21am, Broken wrote:A Tear
Darkness envolped the earth and the waves crashed upon the rocks leaving a blood streaked stain. Standing high above the water on the barrier of rocks, she watched as the world fell at her feet. He ran to her side and side not a word. Staring in horror he saw thousands die and the world eat itself alive. How could all this happen he wondered to himself. Without hearing his question the girl answered. "All this, because of a tear." |
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Holding on his hand, when every second of everyday I feel like letting go.
You hurt me before.Never again.I won't give up and I sure as h*ll won't let you win!
My Poems and Stories at:http://www.quizilla.com/users/hiddeninsight/stuff/
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Re: A Tear: Poem
« Reply #6 on: Jan 14th, 2007, 9:42pm » |
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Do all your poems have death or blood in them?
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Just seen from your profile that you are 15, so I expect they do!
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Re: A Tear: Poem
« Reply #7 on: Jan 14th, 2007, 9:47pm » |
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Verry good,,passionate and heartfelt,,,
The one you removed i seen also....verry deep
Keep up the writing......
I know when i do, it helps me vent,,and reflect on my feelings,
I like your imagry in your words.... A tear.. affecting thosands+ ,,speaks volumes  awesome....
Peace always , Mike
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Re: A Tear: Poem
« Reply #8 on: Jan 14th, 2007, 10:00pm » |
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Not all of them are bloody. For example:
I Stayed with YouFor CH
When I found you,
you were banging your head against the wall.
I was scared to death,
when I got your call.
I knew just what to do,
to try and sooth your pain.
I held you close and let your tears,
fall like the rain.
You begged me not to leave.
I promised I wouldn't.
I stayed up with you into the night,
even though I knew I shouldn't.
When you finally fell asleep,
I smiled at your peace.
And thanked the gods,
to have finally killed the beast.
Forever and For AlwaysFor love
Forever and for always,
I will love you.
Forever and for always,
I will care.
Forever and for always,
I can count on you.
Forever and for always,
I know you'll be there.
Forever and for always,
I will love you.
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Holding on his hand, when every second of everyday I feel like letting go.
You hurt me before.Never again.I won't give up and I sure as h*ll won't let you win!
My Poems and Stories at:http://www.quizilla.com/users/hiddeninsight/stuff/
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