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Tunvald--An Introduction
« on: Jul 30th, 2006, 11:23pm » |
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I apologize for the length of this post.
A couple of weeks ago, ShaneM started a thread about how to tell your kids about your CH. After giving a somewhat mealy-mouthed answer about how my kid had never seen me take a hit (I get hit almost exclusively late at night), I realized that I'd never really talked to her about them. She knew I had CH, but that was about all.
Shane really hit a nerve.
A couple of days later, I sat down with her and explained about CH in detail--how it happens, how it works--(I referred her to the illustration of the trigeminal nerve at the OUCH website) and how it feels. I explained that I still didn't want her to see me take a hit--how I'm not really myself then, and it is a private thing to me--but I wanted her to understand.
Several days later, and her cogitation machine worked things over...
You see, El's way to incorporate things into her world is to put them through the lens of her writing. She's a reflexive, obsessive writer, and spends several hours each day at it--not because she wants to, she says, but because she has to. She can understand that I have cluster headache, but in order to truly "grok" cluster headache, she has to transmute it in such a way that it achieves balance through a person. She's fascinated by fantasy literature and RPG's right now, and so she dreamed up a world in which magic and sorcerers exist--but the price they pay for using magic is cluster headache. The character she focused on is a mage named Tunvald.
I was really struck by her thinking, so I thought I'd show you what's going on with it. If you're interested, I'll post more of her story as it evolves, bit by bit.
I hope no one is offended by this. She does not intend to trivialize a very real and painful condition, nor does she wish to make light of something that all of us have fought our private battles with. It's just her way to understand it.
Please remember she's a kid. If you'd like to make a private comment to her about it, please PM or e-mail your responses to me and I'll forward them to her.
I'll post her prologue now.
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George
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Re: Tunvald--An Introduction
« Reply #1 on: Jul 30th, 2006, 11:24pm » |
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P R O L O G U E
The wind blew gently across a darkened expanse of land. Smoke billowed from craters and the burned remnants of that which had once been alive were strewn across the ground. The only living thing that could be seen was the figure pacing in the center of the battlefield, head buried in its shadowed hands. The mage felt as though his left eye was being stabbed by someone particularly ruthless. He knew from his previous experiences with this that after the pain faded he’d see a black beast striding into the distance.
It was dark and the moon had risen, to spread her pale light upon his slim form. The black thing that lurked in the shadows growled once. This was no longer its domain. It padded quietly past the man, who looked up, needles still stabbing at the edges of his mind. It locked its cold eyes with him as it passed and in them he saw the depths of hell.
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Re: Tunvald--An Introduction
« Reply #3 on: Jul 30th, 2006, 11:43pm » |
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C H A P T E R 1 (A Part)
Darkness
Tunvald kept his head low as he walked into town. He knew for sure he’d be recognized by the clothing he wore, but he wanted to keep as low a profile as possible. He couldn’t think of anything worse than being caught lagging behind the infantry yet again. It didn’t help that the captain of the guard didn’t feel like acknowledging the aftereffects of his magic use. Tunvald had repeatedly tried to get the man to restrict its use to times when it was most needed, but the captain wouldn’t listen, tending to just brush him off. He looked at the sky, stars stretching far above him. The smell of death hung heavy about his form in the darkness, making the animals he passed nervous.
The cobblestone road of the village led to a small inn, where the rowdy sounds of the bar could be heard out on the street. Tunvald paused where the light spilled out of the doorway, letting it fall on his feet. He was thinking. After a few minutes he made up his mind and pushed open the door to the place. It grew silent for a moment after his entrance as people looked his way, before the noise began again. There was nervousness to the bar-goers' voices now though, and they kept looking at him with wary eyes. He walked up to where the innkeeper stood behind the bar.
“I’d like to get a room for the night.” He said in a somewhat gravelly voice.
The innkeeper nodded.
“It will cost you three pieces of silver and a copper.” He said, as if he thought Tunvald couldn’t pay.
The green eyes of the mage narrowed. He knew he was being ripped off because of what he was, but he wouldn’t be able to protest the price in front of so many people. Silently he handed over the money and the innkeeper led him upstairs to a small room. It was somewhat cramped, holding a bed, a wash basin, a chair and the window, which opened inside instead of out. Tunvald turned to the innkeeper before he could sneak off.
“Is there somewhere I can take a bath?” He asked, eyes flashing slightly.
The shorter man looked as though he were thinking about charging for that information, but thought better of it. Silently he pointed to a door across the hall.
“Thank you.” Tunvald said before shutting the door.
He looked out the window of his room for a moment before taking off his sword belt. He’d take it with him into the bathroom, since he never knew when he could be attacked. Lots of people hated the mages.
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Ah! The foreigners put on such airs
Wearing the tangerine suits
And their harlequin eyes.
The pain they inspire
Draws in harmonica melodies
And the feathers of birds
Which flame up at their touch.
It all comes to light in the sheer
Debonair.
(Ellen)
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Re: Tunvald--An Introduction
« Reply #4 on: Jul 30th, 2006, 11:48pm » |
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Oh my...
I can't wait till you post more 
Good for you that you had the talk.
Everyone deals with CH in a different way. I believe children also deal with the pain their parents suffer.
Sounds like this was the best for you and your daughter.
I love the avenue she uses to express her thoughts.
She is one talented girl. 
You're a very compassionate man...your daughter is so lucky to have a Dad like you.
I for one, would love to read it all...when she's finished.
Thank you so much....for sharing your daughter with us. It means so much....
Much love,
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Re: Tunvald--An Introduction
« Reply #5 on: Jul 31st, 2006, 12:29am » |
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How old is your daughter? Her writing is amazing! At the very least, I could definitely see her makin' it big with in the graphic novel genre paired with the right artist, but I wouldn't be surprised to see her make a name for herself in the fantasy novel genre either. I love the images she creates.
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Re: Tunvald--An Introduction
« Reply #6 on: Jul 31st, 2006, 12:44am » |
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on Jul 31st, 2006, 12:29am, ShadowLord wrote:How old is your daughter? Her writing is amazing! At the very least, I could definitely see her makin' it big with in the graphic novel genre paired with the right artist, but I wouldn't be surprised to see her make a name for herself in the fantasy novel genre either. I love the images she creates.
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Thanks for your kind words, Shadowlord. She's....unusual. 
She draws, too. She's drawn a picture of Tunvald already, but she's not happy with it yet. She's photoshopping at it.
El's fifteen.
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Ah! The foreigners put on such airs
Wearing the tangerine suits
And their harlequin eyes.
The pain they inspire
Draws in harmonica melodies
And the feathers of birds
Which flame up at their touch.
It all comes to light in the sheer
Debonair.
(Ellen)
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Re: Tunvald--An Introduction
« Reply #7 on: Jul 31st, 2006, 12:59am » |
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Holy shit... Fifteen? She's not unusual... She's a genius... I really hope that she makes something of her writing. I would kill to have her talent. Whatever you can do, please encourage her to pursue her writing. I really think her ability could put alot of the current so called writers to shame. Honestly, I'm on the edge of my seat to see more of her work. Amazing!
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« Reply #8 on: Jul 31st, 2006, 1:11am » |
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George, El's writing is striking. It conjures up images, graphic and stark..........and waaaaayyy beyond her years!
I know one day, she will be widely read. She is to be encouraged!
Gonna go print, so I can read it all again.
Thank you for sharing, George.
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Re: Tunvald--An Introduction
« Reply #9 on: Jul 31st, 2006, 1:17am » |
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on Jul 30th, 2006, 11:23pm, georgej wrote:I apologize for the length of this post.
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No apology necessary...this read is superb.
I can't imagine that anyone would be offended. Her passion for writing is evident....and I think her understanding of the pain in our lives is remarkable, as seen by her thoughts on paper.
You have a right to be proud.....and she does too
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Chapter 1 (second part)
Letting his tired muscles relax in the warm water of the bath was nice. ...And he got the death scent away from him for the short time he’d have between now and the next time he used magic. He wished that interval could be longer.
Getting out of the bath, he dried himself and dressed, draining the water before returning to his room. He’d made his hair lie flat for once.
He moved silently across the hallway, falling asleep almost immediately in the lumpy bed the innkeeper had given to him. It was a relief. He hadn’t slept for nearly two days. He left the window open to gain advantage of the cool night breeze. It was quite stuffy inside.
The morning sunlight struck his eyes and he mumbled to himself, groaning slightly as he rolled over and covered his head with a pillow. He needed more sleep. He got up reluctantly, knowing he needed to catch up to the army more than he needed sleep at the moment or there would be a post out about a rogue mage. He could be a nuiscance when he wanted to be, but right now he just wanted to get this all over with.
He caught sight of a swift black form out of the corner of his eye, but when he turned to get a better look, it was gone.
Tunvald tightened his sword belt, setting the blade against his hip. He was determined to get an early start, and he knew he wouldn’t be able to buy anything to eat. The innkeeper had taken most of his money the night before when he’d paid for the room.
He crept quietly downstairs and into the kitchen, where he helped himself to dried meats and fruit. He then took a short trip to the stable for a horse.
He saddled a gangly bay and galloped out of the village. His theft wouldn’t be discovered until later that day, and he planned to be some distance away before then. Tunvald’s green eyes narrowed. He knew the Captain wouldn’t wait for him to catch up today either.
He pushed the horse as far as he could, getting off to walk it at intervals. While he walked beside the animal he ate some of the dried foods he’d taken, and kept the rest safe in his small pouch.
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Ah! The foreigners put on such airs
Wearing the tangerine suits
And their harlequin eyes.
The pain they inspire
Draws in harmonica melodies
And the feathers of birds
Which flame up at their touch.
It all comes to light in the sheer
Debonair.
(Ellen)
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For being just a kid, that girl has Talent. Very Cool, keep encouraging her to write.
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Incredible, absolutely incredible. I can't wait to read more.
Nurture that talent George, she is going to be very famous and we'll all be buying her books before long!
I'm really impressed and in awe here
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I'm amazed!
George, keep on posting. Your daughter is very talented writer.
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ohmygawd.......this gave me goosebumps... she nailed it. The line: The black thing that lurked in the shadows growled once my gosh! Its the warning, the first twinge.
I can't wait for the rest of the story!
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on Jul 31st, 2006, 9:50am, JenniferD wrote:ohmygawd.......this gave me goosebumps... she nailed it. The line: The black thing that lurked in the shadows growled once my gosh! Its the warning, the first twinge.
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EXACTLY my reaction! Read this post before the rest of the thread and thought no way. Well, WAY! Goose bumps for sure. That is awesome talent and I can't wait for the rest of the story...
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Nice thread - does your daughter know the origins of the name Tunvald? In Old Norse/Icelandic, Tún is field or meadow, and Vald is power or authority.
When I lived in Iceland, I knew a few Valdimars, Valdíses, etc. One brother in law is named Thórvaldur.
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on Jul 31st, 2006, 10:49am, floridian wrote:Nice thread - does your daughter know the origins of the name Tunvald? In Old Norse/Icelandic, Tún is field or meadow, and Vald is power or authority.
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I don't think she knew the origins of the name, but she does now. She'll be interested.
She came up with the name the way she does with all her RPG and fictional characters--messes around with a random name generator until she finds one that fits. She then writes up a long description of each character's attitudes, personality, voice, gestures, physical appearance, and so forth. Then she draws (by hand or on the computer) a picture of the new personality so she "can see him or her in my head". She may or may not use the character for something else. If not, she just files it away.
Last time I checked, she was up to two hundred and sixty-something.
Thanks for your response, Floridian--and to the others who've responded so positively, thank you as well. I'm absolutely blown away by your kindness. It will mean a lot to El.
She doesn't mind criticism, either--she realizes that she's still learning-- so if anyone has any constructive criticisms, please PM or e-mail them to me. I'll forward them to her.
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Ah! The foreigners put on such airs
Wearing the tangerine suits
And their harlequin eyes.
The pain they inspire
Draws in harmonica melodies
And the feathers of birds
Which flame up at their touch.
It all comes to light in the sheer
Debonair.
(Ellen)
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« Reply #20 on: Jul 31st, 2006, 11:39am » |
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I am ah struck, she is incredible, if she wrote a book now I would buy it.
Dang such talent in such a young girl, just incredible.
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To quote Melissa backwards...
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Incredible stuff! I give it two thumbs way up!!!
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Very good........I always did alot of writeing and drawing when younger......it was my OUT......didn't have brothers or sisters and my folks both worked and I was a latch key kid for MANY years so I was by myself almost all the time. No complaints here tho.....my parents took good care of me and I had a nice home and nice stuff.....wasn't allowed to tell anyone I was home alone cuz I was pretty young when they started but I did FINE !!! Loved to sit and write and draw pics of fantasy things and was BIG (and still am) into fantasy stuff and sci-fi. Your daughter has a SUPER way of writeing useling little detail and wording to TOTALLY give a visual and explain what she is saying. I love it !!!!!! She can express herself thru her writeing.........sumthin alot of kids can only do distructably. Good job.....I am very impressed !!! Visually fantaside Pam
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She may not mind critisism, but I sure can't see anything to critque here.
This is a very mature mind in a 15 yr. old body.
Please keep encouraging her.
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Your daughters writing is superb and i would certainly buy this book if it was on sale and probably any others that she wrote also.
I am on the edge of my seat waiting for the next installment.
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