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Daddys_Devil
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Here's another one. Hope every one likes it.Thanx!
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The cold chill runs
down my spine.
I begin to feel guilty
like I commited a crime.
Its in the base
of my head.
As the rythem pounds
how I wish I was dead.
Louder it comes on
like the beating of a hammer.
Trapt in class
with all this clammer.
I swear if he
shouts one more time,
I might as well
go and lose my mind.
The nails peirce
my brain.
I can't stand
much more of this pain.
Its gone at last.
What hell this has been.
Fianlly its past.
Just in time for another to begin.
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Re: New Poem.!Warning: Very Dark!
« Reply #1 on: Mar 14th, 2006, 7:46pm » |
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nice.
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Re: New Poem.!Warning: Very Dark!
« Reply #2 on: Mar 14th, 2006, 9:09pm » |
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((((((((((((( Felicia ))))))))))))
You hit it on the head again. I wish I could write like you do. It is wonderfull how you can put into words that I am thinking and feeling.
Keep writing no matter what else you do.
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Re: New Poem.!Warning: Very Dark!
« Reply #3 on: Mar 14th, 2006, 11:42pm » |
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I'm glad that you write, Felicia. I'm sure that helps a lot. You're very good at it and a little bird told me that your art is very impressive, too. 
I'm curious... have you ever written anything about how it is for you when it's over? Sometimes, when it's over, I feel elated and giddy. I wish I had the talent to explain how that feels for me. Keep up the great work!
hugs, nani
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Re: New Poem.!Warning: Very Dark!
« Reply #4 on: Mar 14th, 2006, 11:48pm » |
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Felicia,
You should enter the migraine and headache poetry contest advertised on another thread on this page. You write some very vivid poems that really describe things quite well.
Hugz,
Carrie
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Re: New Poem.!Warning: Very Dark!
« Reply #5 on: Mar 15th, 2006, 2:15am » |
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Send this one to the competition.
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Re: New Poem.!Warning: Very Dark!
« Reply #6 on: Mar 15th, 2006, 3:12am » |
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Yip, enter it, you've got a talent Girl! Keep on using it 
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Re: New Poem.!Warning: Very Dark!
« Reply #7 on: Mar 15th, 2006, 10:22pm » |
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Not many people can put into words what we go thru. I admit to having a problem reading your poems, as they are far too close to the mark, and disturb me greatly.
Not many people have the ability to effect me that way. No matter what you decided to do in life, your ability to convey in words such feeling will take you far.
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Re: New Poem.!Warning: Very Dark!
« Reply #8 on: Mar 18th, 2006, 9:30pm » |
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Now I really don't get it  . If my poems are so dark then aren't they the perfect definition of what eveyone here goes through? I mean, this monsters are more powerful than most people could go through(sanely  ) and my poems are so dark most people don't even want to try and understand them.
PS. Thanx everyone for the compliments. They inspire me to keep writing but I really need your opion on this one.
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