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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #1 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 1:43pm » |
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I like the bottom one myself, but that is just me
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« Reply #2 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 1:43pm » |
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #3 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 1:46pm » |
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or mix and match too things you like about one or another
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #4 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 1:47pm » |
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« Reply #5 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 1:48pm » |
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I like the last one too...
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #6 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 1:49pm » |
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Number 2 is my choice as well. Good job!
one tiny little typo though....hope you don't mind me mentioning it? Should read unable TO stay still, instead of unable stay still.
Also, and this is just me being REALLY picky, but Goadsby refers to the condition as cluster headache (singular), as they do migraine. I dunno if it's worth changing it but I always notice that. Like I said, REALLY picky.
Again, great work!!
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #7 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 1:51pm » |
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« Reply #8 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 1:51pm » |
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Margi, I already mentioned the "to" word on the OUCH site, but good catch!
I picked the last one on the OUCH site myself.
Thanks Ken!!
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #9 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:01pm » |
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I like 3 as a whole
I like the layout of 4, but the words in shadow behind the text are too destracting from the text. Someone who knows nothing about clusters could easily find themselves trying to figure out what DHE is or why Lithium is there (as many people associate Lithium with treating psychotic episods). Where in 3 the pics behind the text add to the intensity of the words, rather then taking away from them.
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #10 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:01pm » |
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Ken, really nice work. 
Since you're asking for feedback... a couple suggestions for consistency in text tense:
- Inability to stay still. Comfort in rocking or pacing.
- Attacks/headaches happen in groups or "clusters".
- Attacks/headaches wake you out of a sound sleep.
Oh, my fave is #4. (edit) It looks clean and crisper to me.
Again great work Ken.
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #11 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:03pm » |
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Definitely the last one.
The picture on it says things that can't be put in writing.
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« Reply #12 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:08pm » |
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Number 2, because it has a cleaner layout.
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #13 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:13pm » |
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I like #4...then #2
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #14 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:13pm » |
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If you look at #4 you will notice that it does not have a left eye.... I am lefty... My ch is on the left side.
just wondering if anyone had noticed that....
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #15 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:16pm » |
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on Aug 25th, 2004, 2:13pm, athos wrote:If you look at #4 you will notice that it does not have a left eye.... I am lefty... My ch is on the left side.
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No, I did not notice that. To me, it just looked like a sort of side profile shot. Interesting how you put a touch of your own personality in your work Ken.
Cool
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #16 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:20pm » |
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I vote for 1, although 3 is in a close second. 4 reminds me too much of those horoscope post cards they sell in Spencers and such.
Good work!
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #17 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:21pm » |
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I like #2 and then #4...but they are all great!
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #18 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:28pm » |
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Great Job Ken,
I like #4 without the wording on the background. I think it would look much cleaner and if this is a black ink on newspaper type program then those words and phrases maynot show up very well.
What about a phone number for those without access or literacy for the internet? Just a suggestion.
Again excellent work!!!
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #19 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:32pm » |
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I am not sure if there is a phone number. Is there?
it is being printed on 100lb gloss at 300 dpi, the background words should show up just fine
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #20 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:35pm » |
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Sorry, but OUCH US does not currently have a phone number. There is the address on the ad where people without internet access can write to for more information though.
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #21 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 2:38pm » |
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I think they are all vey good and of equal value!
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #22 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 3:00pm » |
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I like the first one. I like #4 also but is a bit busy. I also would add "or temple" to the symptoms which say "extreme pain associated with one eye"
They are all awesome..great job!
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #23 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 3:11pm » |
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As I posted on the OUCH Board. I like the first one posted there best. Of the 4 other ones, I like #2, then #4.
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Re: Need Critques Quickley Please
« Reply #24 on: Aug 25th, 2004, 3:33pm » |
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#4 ALL THE WAY!!!
Excellent work Bro.
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